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《晚风听秋的娘》敬请各位评阅
品玉
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PostPosted: 2007-11-28 05:13:16    Post subject: 《晚风听秋的娘》敬请各位评阅 Reply with quote



《晚风听秋的娘》
        品玉 

碎草悄悄的
躲进您的鞋窝
昏辉依依的
吻着您的柳蓝
晚夜的灯光下
您------终于
放下手中的针线
慢慢的吐几口
淡淡的云烟了

静静的日
静静的月
晨露不在湿透您的衣裳
您------终于
斜倚楼台
眼望过街的喧嚷
思绪着
从美丽的新娘
老的
不能独自走在大街上
思绪着
两根红烛
跳跃的火焰
羞红了白床

牧野的情歌
在角落回响
一片叶黄
落在您
潮湿的衣襟上

2007.11.28 晚
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kokho
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PostPosted: 2007-11-28 13:05:26    Post subject: Reply with quote

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挂顶 一星期 让大家看看 :)
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乒乓、摄影、诗歌
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放飞心情LL
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PostPosted: 2007-11-29 05:50:46    Post subject: Reply with quote

欣赏了。诗写得不错,写出了一个女人回忆年青时而羞涩,因年老而伤感的神态。
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Lake
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PostPosted: 2007-11-29 10:53:48    Post subject: Reply with quote

情深 细腻
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PostPosted: 2007-12-03 08:03:04    Post subject: Reply with quote

欣赏,写的真贴切。
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lmwtad
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PostPosted: 2007-12-06 19:18:18    Post subject: Reply with quote

情绪上再冷点,色彩就更好了
资质很好,非常适合写形式严格的诗歌
这样的也不多了
努力
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