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PostPosted: 2007-11-22 18:02:01    Post subject: 《4》晓松 来报道 Reply with quote

人气很旺。靠前点儿坐,挨着Lake~
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PostPosted: 2007-11-22 18:07:36    Post subject: Reply with quote

欢迎兄弟
你的前后左右全是美女
看你如何正襟危坐
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PostPosted: 2007-11-22 20:44:15    Post subject: Reply with quote

我可能要分散精力~ Laughing
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PostPosted: 2007-11-23 02:41:36    Post subject: Reply with quote



这里男士 吃香,有请 晓松

把电话发到我的讯息箱里,也注明你接电话的方便时间。

作业和问题讨论,都是我打电话到 参加者进行讨论的 :)

谢谢 。。


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PostPosted: 2007-11-23 15:24:31    Post subject: Reply with quote

晓松 快过来坐好。平时上课我是聚精会神的,只是到考试的时候就忍不住东张西望。 喜欢 team work.
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PostPosted: 2007-11-24 15:25:10    Post subject: Reply with quote

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热烈欢迎 晓松 帅哥








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PostPosted: 2007-11-24 15:25:56    Post subject: Reply with quote



晓航 诗友 看看挂顶贴 :)

作业来了 。。


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PostPosted: 2007-11-26 18:27:31    Post subject: Reply with quote

kokho wrote:

《5》第一个作业,余光中 的成名诗,是关于大陆两岸的。

《5.1》 请大家,把这首诗找出来,我们来谈诗歌结构。放在作业簿。

《5.2》 大家也可以选择,自己读过的最好的,有关评论文章1篇,放在作业簿。

《5.3》 大家以同样的格式,换一个题材,写一首习作。
我会打电话,讨论你的习作。你改写后,才把你的作品,贴到这个贴后面。


先把诗放在作业簿上。
以同样的格式,换一个题材,写一首习作,我得想想,然后再发。


乡愁
——余光中

小时候
乡愁是一枚小小的邮票
我在这头
母亲在那头

长大后
乡愁是一张窄窄的船票
我在这头
新娘在那头

后来啊
乡愁是一方矮矮的坟墓
我在外头
母亲在里头

而现在
乡愁是一湾浅浅的海峡
我在这头
大陆在那头
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PostPosted: 2007-11-26 19:15:13    Post subject: Reply with quote

晓松, 你就作我们古韵的课代表. 别忘了拐俩个靓MM过来喔
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PostPosted: 2007-11-27 10:29:13    Post subject: Reply with quote



晓松 诗友,

给你推荐一下。。

看看 ange_mcy 悟性很高 :)  几乎看不到 余光中的影子了。

看看 孤独牧牛 余光中的味道很浓, 但是那份小女人的家庭幸福 很渲染的!

看看 勿妄言  的内容评论 很精彩独到 :)

看看 半溪明月 的技术评论 很完整 :)

看看 月挂星空 还把 另外3个名家的 乡愁也发出来了。。



这次,我真的是天上掉下一个林妹妹。。 让我抛砖引玉了!


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PostPosted: 2007-11-27 10:33:14    Post subject: Reply with quote

白水 Moonlight wrote:
晓松, 你就作我们古韵的课代表. 别忘了拐俩个靓MM过来喔
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可爱的白水 谢谢你来热闹 :0

礼尚往来 我先过去那里 请几个过来 :)


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PostPosted: 2007-11-29 18:53:26    Post subject: Reply with quote

kokho推荐的几位学友贴子都看过了,的确不错,很又启发。
按照《乡愁》的格式,依葫芦画瓢,习作一首,他写乡愁,我写欢乐。

《欢乐》

孩提时
欢乐是一枚小小的糖果
虽然甜的短暂
却是无忧无虑

学生时
欢乐是一只放飞的风筝
虽然自由自在
却是常受约束

再后来
欢乐是一瓶浓郁的二锅头
虽然滋味苦涩
却是乐此不疲

而现在
欢乐是一张发黄的照片
虽然偶尔翻出
却是往日记忆



交卷了,望多指教。
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PostPosted: 2007-11-29 19:33:45    Post subject: Reply with quote

学习晓松的作业~
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PostPosted: 2007-11-29 21:30:13    Post subject: Reply with quote

偷看一眼, 觉得这首迄今为止模仿得最像。 学习了。
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PostPosted: 2007-12-03 03:08:30    Post subject: Reply with quote



开始 评论 :)

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PostPosted: 2007-12-12 19:29:52    Post subject: Reply with quote

其他朋友的评论很精彩、全面,我没有更新的评论内容。就先学习了。
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PostPosted: 2007-12-12 19:35:31    Post subject: Reply with quote

kokho的总结厚重、深刻,辛苦了。我待好好学习,慢慢消化。
谢谢对我写的诗的评论~
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PostPosted: 2007-12-13 14:53:43    Post subject: 妙对 Reply with quote


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PostPosted: 2007-12-30 01:22:46    Post subject: Reply with quote


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谢谢全乐吧!祝你新年再上新台阶!
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