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PostPosted: 2007-11-22 12:53:30    Post subject: 《6》 JMX2007 来报到 :) Reply with quote



给大家 问好 :)

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PostPosted: 2007-11-22 12:57:40    Post subject: Reply with quote

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热烈欢迎 JMX2007 美媚








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PostPosted: 2007-11-22 13:08:34    Post subject: Reply with quote

数字也美媚
是不是春天了
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PostPosted: 2007-11-22 17:12:49    Post subject: Reply with quote

谢谢晓辉老师的热情款待!谢谢hepingdao ! Laughing Laughing Laughing
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PostPosted: 2007-11-24 15:27:55    Post subject: Reply with quote



JMX2007 诗友 :))


看看挂顶贴 作业来了哟。。


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PostPosted: 2007-11-27 00:13:42    Post subject: Reply with quote

乡愁》余光中

小时候
乡愁是一枚小小的邮票
我在这头
母亲在那头;
长大后乡愁是一张窄窄的船票
我在这头
新娘在那头;
后来呵,乡愁是一方矮矮的坟墓
我在外头
母亲在里头;
而现在,乡愁是一湾浅浅的海峡
我在这头
大陆在那头。

5.1 结构:排比--递进--比喻
5.2 余光中的《乡愁》体现了诗歌的意境美及诗人内心的思国爱乡情感。用"邮票”表达了对母亲的思念,用“坟墓”表达了对母亲的怀念,这是浓烈的亲情;用“船票”表达对新婚妻子的想念,这是热烈的爱情;而“海峡’测表达了对祖国的眷恋,这是深沉的爱国之情。这几组形象构成了乡愁的丰富内涵,使‘乡愁”有了更明确的寄托。四个意象
  邮票 对母亲的思念
  坟墓 对母亲的怀念
  船票 对妻子的想念
  海峡 对祖国的眷恋
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PostPosted: 2007-11-27 00:15:37    Post subject: Reply with quote

习作稍后再交
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PostPosted: 2007-11-27 09:39:26    Post subject: Reply with quote

JMX2007 wrote:
乡愁》余光中

小时候
乡愁是一枚小小的邮票
我在这头
母亲在那头;
长大后乡愁是一张窄窄的船票
我在这头
新娘在那头;
后来呵,乡愁是一方矮矮的坟墓
我在外头
母亲在里头;
而现在,乡愁是一湾浅浅的海峡
我在这头
大陆在那头。

5.1 结构:排比--递进--比喻
5.2 余光中的《乡愁》体现了诗歌的意境美及诗人内心的思国爱乡情感。用"邮票”表达了对母亲的思念,用“坟墓”表达了对母亲的怀念,这是浓烈的亲情;用“船票”表达对新婚妻子的想念,这是热烈的爱情;而“海峡’测表达了对祖国的眷恋,这是深沉的爱国之情。这几组形象构成了乡愁的丰富内涵,使‘乡愁”有了更明确的寄托。四个意象
  邮票 对母亲的思念
  坟墓 对母亲的怀念
  船票 对妻子的想念
  海峡 对祖国的眷恋



《》你的作业 都放在这里哟 :) 不好满天飞了 。。


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PostPosted: 2007-11-27 09:53:35    Post subject: Reply with quote



jmx诗友 等着你 用 乡愁的结构 自己的题材内容 另外写一手!


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PostPosted: 2007-11-27 09:55:35    Post subject: Reply with quote



看看其他朋友们的作业 也许对你 会有启发 :)


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PostPosted: 2007-11-29 00:22:30    Post subject: Reply with quote

理想
小时候
理想是一身绿军装
雄赳赳,气昂昂
巡逻在祖国的边防线上

长大后
理想是三尺讲坛
孔子为我师
精心育桃李

后来阿
理想是一支文笔
追踪李杜白
潇洒游诗海

到现在
理想是那朵莲花
功名利禄全抛下
自在逍遥我回家
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PostPosted: 2007-11-29 00:23:45    Post subject: Reply with quote

理想
小时候
理想是一身绿军装
雄赳赳,气昂昂
巡逻在祖国的边防线上

长大后
理想是三尺讲坛
孔子为我师
精心育桃李

后来阿
理想是一支文笔
追踪李杜白
潇洒游诗海

到现在
理想是那朵莲花
功名利禄全抛下
自在逍遥我回家
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PostPosted: 2007-11-29 10:25:26    Post subject: Reply with quote



很好的尝试 很有道理 :)

为你高兴哟。。

《》我们也探讨一下,为什么这首 你写了 会不会还觉得 少了什么东西?

。。 为何 余光中的那首 很有感染的力量,可是结构用过来了 ,感染力好像不够?

想想 为什么 ?


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PostPosted: 2007-11-30 17:25:43    Post subject: Reply with quote

桃花源里桃花开

人间仙境共徘徊

放下名利轻舟快

驶进桃花源中来
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PostPosted: 2007-11-30 17:27:24    Post subject: Reply with quote

咏梅
寒风呼啸雪花飘
万花纷谢一时渺
唯喜红梅凌寒开
雪压枝头犹在笑
虽无蜂蝶闹枝头
幸有暗香飘九霄
花中君子赋天命
报与世人春将到
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PostPosted: 2007-11-30 17:29:51    Post subject: Reply with quote

哓辉好友
今有两首习作,敬请点评
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PostPosted: 2007-12-03 02:55:10    Post subject: Reply with quote



开始评论 :)

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PostPosted: 2007-12-03 02:56:43    Post subject: Reply with quote



我现在 忙着看作业 先把你的文章 给挂顶 大家看看 :)

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